KELLAN'S BIG DAY, a Twine comic

derektb

Hey Twineos!  I'm working toward making a series of Twine comics, and I used a good friend's birthday as an excuse to make a one-off prototype and work a bunch of stuff out. I feel especially indebted to this forum because I got some pretty cool help from TheMadExile on functionality, so I thought I might as well share the finished thing over here.

http://philome.la/derektb/kellans-big-day

Critique is always appreciated. I can't think of any specific feedback I'm looking for right now (so anything at all is a bonus).  I had a few polish things I was thinking of implementing but didn't get around toKellan's birthday was over a week ago, and these wishes are already belated enough.

Sharpe

Wow, man! That was freaking awesome!  ;D

You might consider making the last panel link back to the start.

Other than that, it was really cool. My favorite was da abandoned mine shaft.

Here's hoping you keep making Twine comics!

andrewdwatt

These are fricking great. I hope Kellan enjoyed them. I agree with Sharpe; being able to return to the menu would be nice. Twine serves your comic timing well! The rampaging bank cracked me up.

queeniechan

Hi, this is fantastic!
I'm doing something similar in Twine too, so great to see you doing this!

derektb

Thanks friends!  I definitely wanted to have the "how to spend your day" choice re-present itself after the last panel of a story, but I couldn't get it to work how I wanted, and time was ticking away.  I think the HTML I settled on for making this comic is generally kind of weird, and so I need to figure out a way to restructure and handle choice without making SugarCube get all squirrelly about it.  Next time!

@queeniechan I'd be interested to see what that Something Similar is!

colbs2411

Amazing work, really funny too I'm hoping to do something similar for a university project and was just wondering how you managed to get the transitional effects to work the way they do