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Hey, new twine user who would love feedback on my game :)
This is the first one I've made so far:
I'd love to hear what you all think.
This was absolutely hilarious. I died on pretty much every move. Loved it! Writing style was perfect with the cheesy pictures.
Thank you so much
Haha! That was great! Funny and fun.
Pictures were awesome.
One bit of constructive feedback: Maybe put your choices on separate lines, or otherwise separate the sentences in some way. It was a little hard to recognize that there were two options until I hovered on them. Hope that helps! Keep up the good work!
Great first effort: that was entertaining
. I also love the pictures, and the tone of the writing.
My suggestion would be to maybe make the pictures a consistent size, and perhaps do a bit of css styling to convey the mood a bit more through the typography... maybe a bloody font and red color for links, or some such.
This is great feedback!
, I will definitely keep placing the choices on separate lines in mind:)
, really cool idea!
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