This is my first attempt at making an interactive story, it's a mystery set around the end of the middle ages. Hope you all enjoy it and feedback is welcome, like I said this is my first time doing this so it's pretty basic.
http://www.philome.la/sarge370/dark-deeds
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Perhaps one thing that could make it more challenging is putting some kind of time limit, so that not all the suspects can be interviewed or not all the rooms searched. I don't know... it may require changing it a bit.
Otherwise, I really did enjoy just as it is. Good work!! And I hope you will make more Twines.
with "time limit" I don't necessarily mean real "time" as such. Perhaps it can relate to the number of people interviewed or rooms entered.
Just a quick example off the top of my head...
If, in each passage where an interview starts or where you enter a room, you were to put:
Then you can use an (if:) statement to limit what is shown.
So each link to and interview and each link to enter a room could start with:
I hope that makes sense. Like I said it is just off the top of my head without much thought.
And, obviously this is not to say that you HAVE to include this feature or do it this way. Just sharing informally a tip on how a "time" dynamic could make it more challenging.
Dude! You said you were new!! That's a super easy (and therefore cool) way to make a timer. Nice job.
lol. I am new! But hey, we learn as we go along!!
You can perform unlimited small actions per day. However, when you take a particular action that is designated as taking a lot of time, the clock advances to the next day and the story progresses accordingly.
Quite similar to systems seen in RPGs that give you time to finish up sidequests, but once you elect to go to the big boss fight, the story advances.
I think this game screams for basic layout changes and, honestly, images of the suspects. Sure, if you went into novella-length descriptions of each, images wouldn't be so necessary, but this is a quick Web game and keeping players' attention is already tough.
This, along with AvaJarvis' Thimble and Thorn, makes me want to write a murder mystery.