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Story Thingy

so, this is my story, it's called Aftermath. It's about a group of people in a post-apocalyptic scene and setting. Their mission is to get food and water for their bunker.

NOTE: THIS IS NOT A FINISHED PROJECT, IT IS STILL IN PROGRESS, I JUST WANTED TO SEE HOW IT IS NOW

Comments

  • You might want to try uploading it to philome and then posting the link. When I click on the link you provided I just get a giant wall of text.
  • Did you "publish to file" before uploading it here?
  • you guys can also import it, and then it will work as is.
  • edited June 2015
    It's cool. You have a good framework here. But if I could give you a small suggestion?
    The choices you give a reader/player should be choices where they have some clue about the consequence of the choice BEFORE they make it.

    Go left or right, to me... doesn't offer anything.

    But...
    go right and there is a gang war going on... maybe they won't notice you.
    Or
    go left and there is a shady guy with an axe in his hand.... but it is JUST THE ONE GUY

    Well... now I have something to think about, and I know that either way, I will have some consequences to face.
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