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Morningvale - My first attempt at Twine
It took me a solid week to code and write the story for all of this. I mostly did it just because it was fun, but I put a lot of work into it and think it'd be silly if only a few of my friends played it before it never saw the light of day again.
It's a bit of a spooky game, you find yourself in this strange world and you aren't sure what happened here, but as you play through it, you piece together bits of the puzzle more and more until you finally realize what happened.
It's my first game, but I spared no expense in coding all of it. I'm already a web design student and figure this is something I can do for personal enjoyment that will also hone my craft, which I hope to pursue as a career.
The game itself will take about an hour to play, but that's a loose estimate based on how long it took myself and two of my friends to play it. There are four endings (none of which are "bad ends") and five achievements you can get.
Let me know what you think, and please, more than anything else, enjoy.
http://www.philome.la/ClassySir/morningvale
It's a bit of a spooky game, you find yourself in this strange world and you aren't sure what happened here, but as you play through it, you piece together bits of the puzzle more and more until you finally realize what happened.
It's my first game, but I spared no expense in coding all of it. I'm already a web design student and figure this is something I can do for personal enjoyment that will also hone my craft, which I hope to pursue as a career.
The game itself will take about an hour to play, but that's a loose estimate based on how long it took myself and two of my friends to play it. There are four endings (none of which are "bad ends") and five achievements you can get.
Let me know what you think, and please, more than anything else, enjoy.
http://www.philome.la/ClassySir/morningvale
Comments
If you're really straight forward with how you progress with the story, I see how that could happen. I say an hour because my friends liked to check every little nook and cranny I put into the game, and I did too just to ensure functionality. I think a bulk of the time might also just be reading, considering the few story-essential walls of text I erected at various points, so depending on how vested you are in reading, that could also affect time spent.
I did try to implement a sort of replayability factor with multiple endings and encourage exploration with saves and achievements.
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Why can't I see beyond the picket fence?
How do you tear a bike chain?
Barren for a tree means 'without/incapable or producing fruit'.
Ah. I picked the key up did I. Nice if it had told me...
How about letting me look through the window before I try and open the door?
Stairs are plural, so 'To the right are the stairs...'
Why would I close the front door behind me? I need it open to let more light in.
What happened to my Blueberry muffin?
The description of the TV in the lounge uses the past tense (It had bunny-rabbit ears)
Mahogany is red rather than dark. Oak, walnut, ebony.
Dark oak wallpaper?
Can I look through the boxes in the storage room for a torch?
Dictionary description repeats after a lookup
I find check points better than a save/load approach.
Hmmm. No way to unpack the spolier...although if you quote it, it'll show you the text...
Thank you for the thorough review and CC.
Shadow is the absence of light. Pretty much - No light, no sight.
You'd have to be very strong...
The tree cannot bear fruit in this place so barren is accurate
The windows are too grimy for light to penetrate. You cannot see through the window
Close the front door - One less way for danger to find you
No idea. Spoooooky.
"it had bunny-ears" - I'll make a note of that, thank you
"oak walnut ebony" - Also good to note.
dark oak wallpaper - misworded, the walls are made of dark oak wood.
dictionary - this was intentional
checkpoints - this did not even occur to me during development, nor do i know how to code it, but you make a fair point, and there are some places i would rather the player not be able to save at.